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Maybe no one noticed?
Maybe they weren’t watching?
Maybe this was a dream?
Maybe I could redo it?
I was
motionless under the water trying to stay at the bottom until my lungs couldn’t
take it anymore. Knowing that “failed
dive,” was probably being announced across the whole CC pool facility, I did
not want to resurface but eventually my chest told me it was time.
As I pushed
off of the clean white tiles through thirteen feet of still, serene, motionless
water, I prepared myself for the moment of silence to break.
My brown eyes
popped above surface not only to encounter my team consisting of 90 athletes,
but the whole rivalry team, all the parents in the stands, the life guards
working there, the people that use the public swimming facilities, little kids,
the patronizing judges and at least three camera lenses staring directly into
my soul.
I shut it
all out again going back to my serene underwater life where I couldn’t hear
anything except for my own R-rated thoughts (we were always told to scream
those words under water before resurfacing).
At first I
couldn’t tell if the water was leaking into my eyelids or if I was letting it out.
Now I was
crying. Grrrreeaattt!
I swam over
to the edge of the pool and slipped out of the water trying to make as subtle
movements as possible. My teammates and coach comforted me as I interpreted
what it was like to fail a dive.
A double
reverse flip was my cruelest nightmare, but now my best memory.
As the next
couple weeks went by I checked the account on Flickr that our team had set up
for posting pictures.
LO AND
BEHOLD, there was a slide show of me falling off the board, swinging my legs
back, completing one flip, half of the next, landing face first into the water,
crawling out of the water, then crying to my coaches.
I would
like to thank whoever took those photos and posted them for the world to see J.
So, incase
you were wondering:
Yes,
everyone noticed.
Yes,
everyone was watching.
No, this
was not a dream.
And no, I was not allowed to redo it.
Photo taken by parent of swim team member. We have a flickr page that the photos are posted on for us to have.
And no, I was not allowed to redo it.
Photo taken by parent of swim team member. We have a flickr page that the photos are posted on for us to have.

Oh my god I love the humor in this! I laughed out loud reading it (and not the "laugh out loud" where you look at the screen and think "that was funny" with a straight face- real laugh, cross my heart)- Humor is hard to accomplish in writing when you're working with real life situations. I really think your voice was strong in this piece- I felt like you were telling me this in person.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a funny story. I'm sorry that happened, but now its a great story! I thought you wrote it really well also, so good job! You really drew the reader in with the questions in the beginning, and then I liked how you answered them all in the end, it really tied it all together. The internal monologue really brings out your writing style and narrator voice and I thought it worked really well for this piece!
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